Please review and critique this part of my story?

This is seriously amazing, I want to read more. If there is more you should post it in the "Additional details". It was written so well, with such good details, yet not too many which is good because you don't want the reader to lose interest. I can picture the scene perfectly in my head because of the way the scene is written, I can hear the voices and visualize the girl's arm. Amazing. However, the one thing you may want to change is the very end when you say "halfway to the door" you should say "halfway out the tent" seeing as that it is a tent, and it doesn't have a door, just a flap. But amazing story, keep writing please :)